Schism

Apr. 21st, 2014 05:03 pm
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Schism always tried to be the most knowledgeable man in the world. He traveled, talked to strangers, and went diving into previously unexplored caverns just to mark all of these places and experiences inside his mind and journal. "After all, what could possibly hinder the pursuit of knowledge in a world without death?" he would have remarked, laughing, on any other day.


Looking at the thundercloud forming in the shadow of Mount Aramis, Schism knew exactly what could bring an end to his lust for knowledge. From the warm, if hostile, street gutter of Coburntown, the old man could see, through the crack of light that separated the dark valleys and icy tundra from the sunny cities, jungles, and arid deserts, the black air currents roiling in the sky.


Schism witnessed red lightning jut from the murderous dark mass, as tall as the mountain itself, through the sky. Instantly, he remembered the day the sun stopped moving across the sky, when weather systems vanished. In his mind, he watched as the towers were swept into the sea all over again. He recalled the quaking screams of women swallowed by the earth as it caved underneath their feet. As if it had just happened, he envisioned the entire horizon illuminated in scarlet as it roared towards him, stopping only to drop as ashes into an endless ocean. Then, the heartbreaking serenity of silence as the few remaining human voices realized that it had all stopped; they had survived.


These few people never knew why the world had ended, or why it had finished ending, or why they had been selected to live in a world with an immobile sun and no death. Schism had always tried to help them answer these questions, but people, particularly those of Coburntown, did not like to discuss what they could not control. They ridiculed his articulate speech, unkempt white hair, and emphatic facial expressions. They kicked him in the teeth, stole his clothes, and urinated on his prone body. He had felt frail before they beat him--after, however, he found his own strength.


He pulled a discarded jacket and trousers out of the waste heap behind a house in Coburntown and donned a new name: Schism. He could be the rift between the mundane and the divine, the crack between reacting with feeble anger to the injustice dealt to him and seeking solutions in a world filled with uncertainty. He had lived for forty-five years in search of the answers that could unite these lost humans. Humans who had been abandoned by a fickle god.


In all of that time, he had never seen a raincloud. Weather didn't exist in the new world, beyond what certain regions experienced all the time. The valley west of Coburntown never experienced anything but the chill of sitting in the shade of Mount Aramis. Schism felt the hairs on his arms stand up in remembrance of the day the world ended. His old body began to uncontrollably shake in his ragged clothing.


Hovering over the valley, the inky cloud reverberated with malevolent ruby flashes. Dimly visible within the rapidly swirling vapors, a pearlescent object began to protrude from the bottom of the largest cluster. A loud boom echoed across the sky, louder than any thunder crack.


In spite of his fear, Schism charged headlong at the cloud. He jumped over paupers sleeping in the city streets and slipped past people who were simply gawking at the crackling blot in the western sky. He bolted past the city gates without a care about the guards. It's connected, he thought, as he started up the cliffs overlooking the valley. This is how the world ended. As fast as his old body could carry him, he scrambled over granite protrusions while narrowly dodging pine trees. Everything I need to know is right here, in this moment. He cleared the ridge in mere minutes to look down into the valley.


He witnessed it then: the eye. A massive eye, nearly as big as the valley itself, emotionlessly gazing down on the valley while streams of air rippled up and swirled around it. It looked down upon the valley and spewed fire. It shined with a careless grace upon the carnage--a house exploded, sending timbers flying hundreds of feet through the air while the ground below blackened to ash. The eye dilated, and six pulsating, pallid, elongated appendages leapt from the cloud towards the ground, scraping at the dirt or something the old man could not quite see from the top of the ridge.


In a short moment, the tentacles were held close to the eye itself. One after another, the eye breathed fire in a brilliant ray over each of the ends of these tentacles. Schism thought he could hear screams over the crushing roar of fire that swept over the charred earth. Suddenly, just as the sixth tentacle was about to receive that beam of flame, a blinding light flashed through the sky.


The cloud, the eye, and the tentacles were all gone. Schism tried to take out his journal and write down what he had seen, but his arm was jerking uncontrollably and made all of his letters impossible to read. Although he was trembling furiously, Schism slowly walked down to the valley floor. Was that god? he asked himself, stepping over downed trees into the sprawling field of ashes.


There, he met the survivor.

Date: 2014-04-22 05:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kickthehobbit.livejournal.com
Your takes on the topic are always seriously interesting—I think I've loved everything you've written, and this is no exception. You've got a fascinating look at the whole "step on a crack" prompt and some excellent lines.

Date: 2014-04-24 12:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fodschwazzle.livejournal.com
Thanks for always taking the time to read my stuff. Very glad you enjoyed it!

Date: 2014-04-25 12:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kickthehobbit.livejournal.com
Thanks for writing stuff that's consistently good. ;)

Date: 2014-04-22 02:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] i-17bingo.livejournal.com

They ridiculed his articulate speech, unkempt white hair, and emphatic facial expressions.

Well, it's kind of stressful, and while it's deplorable, it makes sense that frightened people would react with frustration at such a situation.

They kicked him in the teeth, stole his clothes, and urinated on his prone body.

Okay, come on, guys! That just seems a little excessive.

There so much insanity and (the good kind of) WTFery in this piece that I have no idea how to respond to it.

Date: 2014-04-23 03:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fodschwazzle.livejournal.com
Those incidents are kind of a compilation of the five years of mistreatment that Schism suffered before his epiphany and naming. And there is a second reason for the excessive behavior.

Thanks for commenting. I'm glad you liked it!

Date: 2014-04-22 08:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] elledanger.livejournal.com
This was a really interesting take on the prompt; and I just love the idea of people surviving armageddon. Such a fun idea to play with.

Date: 2014-04-24 12:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fodschwazzle.livejournal.com
We're addicted to destruction. But fire is fun so it's OK. Thanks for reading and enjoying!

Date: 2014-04-23 01:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] solstice-singer.livejournal.com
Wow! How terrifying!

Date: 2014-04-24 12:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fodschwazzle.livejournal.com
I'm glad it terrified you!

Date: 2014-04-23 05:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] roina-arwen.livejournal.com
Intriguing world with an interesting protagonist. I love the name "Schism"!

Date: 2014-04-24 12:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fodschwazzle.livejournal.com
Wasn't sure about the name, but I will take this as validation. Thanks for reading!

Date: 2014-04-23 06:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] malruniel11.livejournal.com
The survivor... hmmm... I'm kinda wanting to know more. This is a good thing. Bravo!

Date: 2014-04-24 12:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fodschwazzle.livejournal.com
There's more to tell. Thanks for reading!

Date: 2014-04-24 02:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] malruniel11.livejournal.com
Glad to hear it! You are certainly welcome!

Date: 2014-04-23 04:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] itsjustc.livejournal.com
I like your take on the topic.

This is a well constructed world with an interesting protagonist.

Date: 2014-04-24 12:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fodschwazzle.livejournal.com
I hope we'll see more of him. One can only guess, based on weekly prompts. Thanks for commenting!

Date: 2014-04-23 10:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jem0000000.livejournal.com
Hopefully the survivor's okay. It's really hard to search for knowledge in such an uncertain world.

Date: 2014-04-24 12:16 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fodschwazzle.livejournal.com
We'll see, perhaps. Thanks for reading me every week, much appreciated.

Date: 2014-04-25 05:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jem0000000.livejournal.com
You're welcome.

Date: 2014-04-24 12:19 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] violaconspiracy.livejournal.com
It's like a cross between the spaghetti monster, C'thulu, and a beholder, in the sky.

Is the survivor Tyrael? It's got to be Tyrael.

Date: 2014-04-24 12:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fodschwazzle.livejournal.com
He's too busy eating so much that he cannot take another bite.

I'm thinking of having one of my students illustrate this monster. She's a budding tattoo artist, so maybe after that I'll get it placed on my belly so that, if I get overweight, he'll scare me back into thinness.

Date: 2014-04-24 12:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] suesniffsglue.livejournal.com
LOVE the name Schism. Really well done!

Date: 2014-04-24 12:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fodschwazzle.livejournal.com
I humbly accept your approval of the name. Thank you for reading!

Date: 2014-04-24 01:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] eternal-ot.livejournal.com
Amazing imagery..good work!

Date: 2014-04-24 05:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] halfshellvenus.livejournal.com
This is a fascinating setup here-- I found myself wondering if these were primitive descriptions of volcanic explosions or something less familiar, and whether the thing that visited Schism's valley was a spaceship or something else entirely.

The ending leaves me feeling as if a larger story is at work here, which piqued my interest.

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